Poetry of the Soul

Poetry is thoughts that breathe, and words that burn. ~Thomas Gray

Can I help you? July 7, 2010

Filed under: poetry — laurenmichelleotheim @ 11:16 pm

All work and no play
sends the poetry away
five words a day
“Hididyoufindeverythingok?”
“Good!” (could equally be substituted for “OhI’msorryIcancallguestservicesandseeifwehaveit!”)
“Wouldyouliketokeepyourcoathangers?”
“Yourtotalis_______”
“Haveagoodday!”
Water
GASP
I NEED water
too many people with too little to say
makes you wonder about consumerism today
why do they shop if they don’t want to pay?

(c) Lauren Otheim – 2010
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27 Responses to “Can I help you?”

  1. Jingle Says:

    very creative words..
    enjoyed the playfulness and wit in it.
    😉
    Cheers!

  2. […] Lauren:  https://laurenmichelleotheim.wordpress.com/2010/07/07/253/ […]

  3. Artswebshow Says:

    this is some fantastic wordplay

  4. brian Says:

    nice word play…great to see you back. how is the summer going?

  5. dustus Says:

    That was awesome. Props to you. cheers

  6. Nick Says:

    Lol… I see work is giving you some good experience…

  7. that sums it up so well:)

  8. williewizzy Says:

    Haha…that’s make me laugh!

  9. this is playful and thumbs up worthy!

  10. Talon Says:

    I smiled all the way through this poem. I especially like that the poet in you is still playful regardless of dealing with customers all day long. This was fun!

  11. Desiree Says:

    You’re really creative!

  12. DiamondsAndDogs Says:

    I love it. It was so original and so true. Lovely

  13. buttercup600 Says:

    Powerful poem…You wove it together so well…write on:) Hugs x

  14. Jingle Says:

    http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/07/08/the-celebrate-poet-of-june-award-nomination-announcement/

    the deadline to vote for poets is Sunday…
    one last chance,
    you gain one vote for yourself when you vote 4 others,
    simply reminder, ignore if you dislike it.

  15. trisha Says:

    the squirrel hidden inside us? which just wants to pile. 🙂

  16. Creative! Connecting the words together gave it a stressful feel, along with the bit about water. Hope you are at least having some fun at work!

  17. ericabuys Says:

    Love it!

  18. williewizzy Says:

    hahaha….that’s fun writing! Great!

  19. Olivia Says:

    This is so cute…………. 🙂
    xoxox

  20. Olivia Says:

    Hello, friend, how are you?

    I invite you to our Monday Poetry Potluck Party at Jingle Poetry Community, a new place for poets who share ans encourage…

    We have features such as poem of the week, poetry blog of the week, and poet of the week, plus Sunday poetry news dispatch, if you attend our Monday Party, there is a chance that you poetry blog is represented by one of our officials, and your talent will be highlighted or exposed to wider audience,

    No specific rules, simply linking in 1 to 3 poems, it could be an old poem, let us read and comment for you. Feel free tasting other poetry treats, all enjoyable expereicne…

    http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/09/poetry-potluck-big-bang.html

    Click on the link, you will see a blue button, click on the blue button, you will see three boxes, your specific poem link to be placed in first, then your name or blog name, then your email connected to your blog….

    Happy Monday!
    Let the fun begin!
    Cheers!

  21. r0013 Says:

    Very clever, I enjoyed this. : ) and chose to nominate you to Thursday Poets Rally week.

    🙂 -Roxanne

  22. Jingle Says:

    welcome to poets rally week 34,
    it has been a while…
    hope all is well.

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  24. actober Says:

    whoa, i love your style of writing here. creative as hell!

    http://actober.wordpress.com/


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