Poetry of the Soul

Poetry is thoughts that breathe, and words that burn. ~Thomas Gray

The Treasure Stone February 18, 2010

Filed under: poetry — laurenmichelleotheim @ 9:16 am

The dirt packed alley ways

wage war on weeds slowly

creeping.

Descendents of prairie planes

no longer welcome,

they find refuge between the worn

chain link fences, beneath

the summer sun.

Pitter patter children’s feet

sink mud, squelch.  Toes glory.

A sword of pine branch,

no sheath, no handle, straight blade,

fights a growing forest of cheat grass.

Reaching final destination,

scratched by tumble weeds,

raw hands dig deep, uncovering

a simple smooth stone treasure.

She holds it to her tiny breast

and  thinks

this must be

forever.

(c) Lauren Otheim – 2010

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15 Responses to “The Treasure Stone”

  1. and you mention my imagery…wow. so vivid its breathtaking…a wonderfully peaceful piece.

  2. laurenmichelleotheim Says:

    Thank you so much!

  3. Yousei Hime Says:

    Lauren, thank you for leaving your link in your comment. This poem is so rich in imagery. There are so many details. It’s funny that I understand this. I was a hoarder of stones in my youth. In fact, I still can’t resist one that is just the right size and texture. Thank you for sharing this.

  4. laurenmichelleotheim Says:

    Thank you!! I’m so very glad you could relate and enjoyed it! I know, I am still a sucker for pretty stones or abnormally shaped ones.

  5. kseverny Says:

    this has a lot of wonderful energy within it

  6. DeAnna Says:

    wow Lauren you have become quiet a poet, keep going girl! I really enjoyed how the poem flowed and (like everyone else) love the imagery

  7. laurenmichelleotheim Says:

    Thanks, DeAnna! I’m so glad you liked it!

  8. Jennifer Says:

    The ending is just perfect – it ties it together beautifully, with emotion.
    Jennifer

    • laurenmichelleotheim Says:

      Thank you! I had initially wondered about the ending! It means a lot that you understand it and believe it works well.

  9. I.S. Says:

    holding on to something dear…ahh if only it’s forever. great poem.

    ~IS

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